{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25227041","dateCreated":"1276690492","smartDate":"Jun 16, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25227041"},"dateDigested":1532128392,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Final post","description":"Wait! Who is this 18 year old kid? I'm confused! Please tell me.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25216845","dateCreated":"1276645458","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25216845"},"dateDigested":1532128392,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday","description":"I can't believe you killed off Dean! He was the only one I really understood! How could you do this?
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\nI read your last four entries in succession, and it was quite a battle. You are the action\/adventure king, it seems to me. I suspect you've seen way too many films of this sort in your lifetime...and you certainly have the hang of it. I'm really glad that you stuck with this project and were able to accomplish so much with it. You wrote plenty each and (nearly) every day, and demonstrated a consistency that you struggled with all year. This is a great way to end the course.
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\nMake sure you print yourself a hard copy of this before you walk away. It's worth saving.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25231661","body":"Thanks Mr.Fischer!","dateCreated":"1276702674","smartDate":"Jun 16, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"joefaisal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/joefaisal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"25209371","dateCreated":"1276623532","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25209371"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Monday","description":"Wow! In a novel full of suspense, this most recent set of scenes is even more suspenseful. I'm not sure I'm following all the details of the heist, but I'm getting the general gist. It's a very complicated plan--plenty of drama.
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\nI'm eager to see how it all turns out.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25216741","body":"I'm done","dateCreated":"1276645214","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"joefaisal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/joefaisal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"25139997","dateCreated":"1276285128","smartDate":"Jun 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25139997"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday","description":"I assume he's not an actual cat, right?
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\nThe short summary has helped a lot; now I feel as if I know what's been going on. Moreover, the writing for this entry is much, much better. Not so much crazy action and plenty of slow, careful dialogue and description, so you're taking me along with you. I get the sense that you're taking us into the final show down here, but I'm not quite sure what it will be.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25203029","body":"To tell you the truth i don't know how this will end lol.","dateCreated":"1276606649","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"joefaisal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/joefaisal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"25061419","dateCreated":"1276086675","smartDate":"Jun 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25061419"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday","description":"Joe: You need to read my comments; you've skipped the last 3. Time for a break from the guns!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25012681","dateCreated":"1275956743","smartDate":"Jun 7, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25012681"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Sunday night","description":"Joe:
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\nI'm no longer able to follow this. It's become one, long, endless battle scene, and I no longer can figure out who's fighting whom and why. You need to shift gears here and find another way to write this. Endless battle just doesn't work.
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\nIn class tomorrow (Tuesday), come explain where you are in the plot and we can discuss ways for you to move beyond all the chase and fight stuff. Enough already!!!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24984437","dateCreated":"1275869932","smartDate":"Jun 6, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24984437"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Weekend post","description":"This Dean has quite a temper...and plenty of athletic ability as well. This is a pretty long chase\/fight\/battle\/whatever scene, and it's been a little difficult for me to keep all the players straight. Perhaps when it's over I'll be better able to sort it all out. Do remember to give these guys some down time. They must be exhausted at this point.
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\nAs I mentioned before, I'm still a bit unclear about the central conflict, the central problem that is driving the story about this point. Could you write back to this post and explain it? That would really help me understand your story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24867715","dateCreated":"1275484232","smartDate":"Jun 2, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24867715"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday's post","description":"You clearly like these battle scenes! Very dramatic and fun to read. I'm still a bit confused about what the boys are up to--please help me with this when we meet on Thursday in class. The action is moving very quickly, so I'm a little lost about their overall plan.
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\nOn Thursday, we'll start working on planning the middle of the novella, and this is what you need to focus on now: planning. So far, you've given these guys several exciting adventures. But I'm not yet clear about the central conflict, the central problem that is the focus of the story. Be thinking about this, and we'll discuss it further on Thursday.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25074579","body":"the problem is that these guys robbed this billionaire mobster's bank, they know exactly that it was him they were robbing then they find out with when Dean gets captured. So what they had in mind is assassinate him before he kills them. The guys go into this plan underestimating him and they find out what he can do. The point is so far (the men don't know it yet though.) is that this guy is toying with them and they have to step up there game. I'll get into the choice they can make after they figure out he's screwing with them.","dateCreated":"1276106786","smartDate":"Jun 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"joefaisal","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/joefaisal","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24839453","dateCreated":"1275411412","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24839453"},"dateDigested":1532128393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"weekend post","description":"Joe:
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\nI'm starting to lose the focus of your story. The individual episodes are exciting and dramatic, but I'm not clear about the overall direction. Consider using chapter breaks. That would force you to organize the story into scenes, and then to break for a chapter when each scene was over. Right now, it's starting to seem like action after action after action. Fun, but confusing. I'm not clear about what the boys are up to at this point. I did suspect that the limo driver was an enemy, but who is Don Don? Again, I'm a little confused about the overall story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24826173","dateCreated":"1275394735","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24826173"},"dateDigested":1532128394,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"credit for second deadline","description":"20\/45 (2000\/4500)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}