{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25227897","dateCreated":"1276693648","smartDate":"Jun 16, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25227897"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Ending","description":"I don't know about this! Everything comes out so neatly. I have a hard time believing that there's not something more to Mr. M's transformations. Sure, you've provided a logical conclusion; it just doesn't feel all that satisfying.
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\nWhen you come back to this (10 years from now?), give some more thought to this part.
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\nIt's clear that you had fun with this story from the very start. It evolved as you wrote it, as any good story tends to do, and while this made it a bit confusing at times, it also made it fun to watch you work it out.
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\nMake sure you print out a hard copy of this for yourself. You'll enjoy coming back to it in the future, I suspect.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25137777","dateCreated":"1276277238","smartDate":"Jun 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25137777"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday","description":"I, too, am wondering why he's giving them so many clues that seem to be leading them on the chase...but I'm sure you'll explain this. So much I'm wondering about!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25079495","dateCreated":"1276115625","smartDate":"Jun 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25079495"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Wednesday","description":"OK, the four voice thing is a little...weird... but I'll go with it. I'm not sure I followed all of the pages stuff, but I don't get the sense that it's crucial.
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\nThe chase is on.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25061551","dateCreated":"1276087130","smartDate":"Jun 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25061551"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday","description":"The plot thickens! I'll be curious to know the traveler's motive as this develops. He's been so mysterious, so it's hard for me to figure out what he might be up to.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24984325","dateCreated":"1275869558","smartDate":"Jun 6, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24984325"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Sunday","description":"OK! Now you have the story moving towards a climax! You're just at the beginning of your run up to the great suspense, but now things HAVE to happen; now the plot has a very specific direction. I like how the wife's role in all of this is very unclear but clearly very important.
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\nKeep building the tension and playing up his fears. This is a pretty terrifying moment, and he's very disoriented.
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\nLet's see how you get him out of this box.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24951827","dateCreated":"1275679855","smartDate":"Jun 4, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24951827"},"dateDigested":1532128330,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Friday's post","description":"OK. I now get it that figuring out the traveler's identity is your main conflict. You keep coming back to this, so you should go with it. Think how you can create a series of steps that build toward a climax: steps that might involve getting clues and then more clues and then more clues, and then getting closer and closer and closer....etc.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24854275","dateCreated":"1275437946","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24854275"},"dateDigested":1532128331,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Weekend\/Tuesday","description":"This story is getting odder and odder. The story the narrator is telling: is this a story that connects to an earlier meeting with the visitor? It hardly seems like a random story. It's a little hard to follow with all of the interruptions, but I'm sure it will be clearer once he's done the story.
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\nStart thinking about how you'll organize the middle of the novella; that's what we'll be working on in class on Thursday. I think you are now doing more that moves the story forward, but you've not yet created a clear conflict or drama for us to follow...other than the question, "what the heck is up with the traveler?" That might be enough to sustain the novella, but I'm not sure it will be. You'll see.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"24875915","body":"what travaler? do you mean the tourguide? and i thought the conflict t be trying to figure out who the man was. Also the story of the tour guide has its own mini conflict. havent quite thought of that yet","dateCreated":"1275495241","smartDate":"Jun 2, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"DankLar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DankLar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24826897","dateCreated":"1275395753","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24826897"},"dateDigested":1532128331,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"credit for second deadline","description":"45\/45 (4500 new words)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24773243","dateCreated":"1275139959","smartDate":"May 29, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24773243"},"dateDigested":1532128331,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"friday's post","description":"Dan:
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\nYour story is starting to get hard to follow. You're racing through scenes, sometimes putting multiple scenes in a single paragraph. When you move this quickly, you lose me. Try to start thinking in terms of scenes, scenes that you can develop in detail. Again, right now you're focusing only on moving the plot from place to place, and this is confusing. It might help if you made a plan for the next several pages, mapping out the scenes so you can develop them with a bit more detail and care. You've got good ideas here; take your time to develop them into a good story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"24817269","body":"so for this new post, i edited a little bit it in the scene where they bump into eachother on the street, and it seems that everytime i copy my story into this it loses the paragraphs i made, thats why some are very long","dateCreated":"1275360666","smartDate":"May 31, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"DankLar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DankLar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24720971","dateCreated":"1274989688","smartDate":"May 27, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24720971"},"dateDigested":1532128331,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday's post","description":"OK, this is pretty weird, so I'm glad you explained it to me. Otherwise I'd have no idea what was going on with the age-changing man...though I'm not really sure I do understand what's going on, other than that he keeps changing. Crazy idea--and that's what makes it interesting.
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\nNow you have to figure out what you want to do with it. I get the sense that you have a plan, so I'll step back and wait to see what will unfold. Hmmmmmmm.....","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}