{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25217037","dateCreated":"1276645872","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25217037"},"dateDigested":1532128366,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday","description":"This story keeps unfolding...and that's fine. If you have a general sense of where you're headed (without giving away that ending!), please let me know. See if you can end this project at a good resting place. You might not get a chance to get back to it right away, so finding a place to break might be useful.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25028177","dateCreated":"1276004921","smartDate":"Jun 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25028177"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Monday","description":"It's coming together! How cool. While there are plenty of unresolved problems and questions to give you a ton more to write about, you have given us confidence that the pieces will fit together. So much mystery remains! Why is the daughter in heaven? what happened when he was shot? how does the heaven\/hell frame fit in?
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\nKeep writing!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24951627","dateCreated":"1275679383","smartDate":"Jun 4, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24951627"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Friday's post","description":"Quick! Remind me! Is E married or not????
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\nThese are very interesting developments, though not entirely unexpected. Sometimes your story seems to wander--with the details about the fishing equipment, for example--but then I keep thinking, "Maybe it IS all connected." I know: I have to wait and see. I'll try to be patient.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24890783","dateCreated":"1275524233","smartDate":"Jun 2, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24890783"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Wednesday's post","description":"So, who's obsessed with sea food: you or Ethan? You certain have sea food on your mind. It sounds like quite a meal. I get the sense that you're leading up to something, but I"m not sure where you're headed yet. The detail are fun...but it's time to bring in a major conflict or problem. As I mentioned, we'll work on this in class on Thursday.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24853991","dateCreated":"1275437468","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24853991"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Weekend\/Tuesday","description":"You've totally immersed yourself in this world, enabling you to draw a very specific picture of each scene you walk through, and this is making it fun to read your story. I keep wondering about E's wife (he's married, right?), but perhaps I'll have to get over that. He's clearly taken in by this woman, her family, and the setting. Who wouldn't be?
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\nI'm still wondering how this will connect to the opening. This story seems to be developing a life of its own. Be thinking about how you will organize the middle portion of your story. We'll work on this in class on Thursday, but give some thought to the next steps. Or perhaps you already have.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"24856829","body":"Like I've said, I do have a master plan with this story. The opening is connected to the story!! (Don't worry!) Although I won't give away a lot about what's going to happen, this story is ultimately about Ethan recounting his life. So hopefully that might satisfy the wonder of the story for now...much of the plot hasn't even happened yet!
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\nI have a question though: what would a good pace for this novella writing be? 1000 words per day? 1500?","dateCreated":"1275443292","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Bendaman94","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Bendaman94","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24826855","dateCreated":"1275395700","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24826855"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"credit for second deadline","description":"45\/45 (4500 new words)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24728911","dateCreated":"1275004527","smartDate":"May 27, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24728911"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday's post","description":"THis is a pretty powerful first meeting! He's certainly taken by her. You clearly like descriptive writing, and this description is quite complete. You've now bridged the plot gap you had before; now I see how Katie fits in.
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\nI wonder if you'll tie this back to your frame soon. Just curious.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24679873","dateCreated":"1274920005","smartDate":"May 26, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24679873"},"dateDigested":1532128367,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"wednesday","description":"Interesting developments. You jump pretty quickly from meeting Katie to being married and raising a child with her, but perhaps that's not all that important. I sense that you're working out something larger, and the small details of plot development are not nearly as important. I'm eager to have a better understanding of your master plan, but I'll try to be patient.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"24682841","body":"Well you see, most of those details are just topic sentences for bigger paragraphs and for more plot development on the Ethan's bio. I probably should have made that more clear-there was a lot of ideas that I had today that I plan on expanding on, specifically with the relationship between Ethan and Katie.","dateCreated":"1274924473","smartDate":"May 26, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Bendaman94","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Bendaman94","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24657213","dateCreated":"1274897505","smartDate":"May 26, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"jakec_fischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jakec_fischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24657213"},"dateDigested":1532128368,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Losing Sight","description":"The introduction (section before "Part 1") was great. I liked it a lot. But I feel as though you lose focus in Part 1 itself. We go from the girl, standing at the gates of heaven, to suddenly another character. I'm not even quite what was going on. You seem to talk about Yorkshire a lot, and that's great, but to be honest it just gets boring and confusing.
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\nFurther, you emphasize the presence of music, but it's just not connected to the rest of the story.
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\nIf you are going to go switch scenes like you have, you need to make the transition clearer to the reader. And by the way, for connection, don't just tell yourself that you are going to have it all be connected at the end (please, do it within the paragraph.)
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\nAgain, this is purely my opinion. But it just seems confusing and irrelevant, even if it turns out not to be in the end.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"24657377","body":"I do like the very last paragraph, actually.
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\nJust the two prior ones seem out of place...","dateCreated":"1274897638","smartDate":"May 26, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"jakec_fischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jakec_fischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"24614427","dateCreated":"1274831398","smartDate":"May 25, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24614427"},"dateDigested":1532128368,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday's post","description":"I have no idea where you're going wit this or how it connects with the first section...but that's what's so good about it. You've got me thinking: how does this man's story relate to the larger frame? where will the two connect? Don't rush it! No need to bring the pieces together before you're ready.
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\nI'm very much enjoying this man's story. It's quite rich, with the music in particular, and you're clearly having fun writing about him. I get the sense that you have a clear and very elaborate plan here...and that's perfect.
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\nKeep going!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}