{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"25203107","dateCreated":"1276606945","smartDate":"Jun 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25203107"},"dateDigested":1532128375,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"MOnday","description":"While the ending is sad, you've at least spared her the pain of having to remember him. But I wonder if this would be better (not remembering what she has lost) or worse (now having to live without the feeling that she has ever loved).
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\nYou clearly had fun with this. It took you a while to find a focus, but once G arrived, the story took form and shape and the writing was much more lively. It's clear that you wrote the type of story that you like (romance), and this made it that much more fun to read.
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\nMake sure you print out a copy so you can store it away somewhere to revisit some time in the future. You'll enjoy re-reading it.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25131577","dateCreated":"1276262629","smartDate":"Jun 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25131577"},"dateDigested":1532128375,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday","description":"You are so mean! You've set her up for a big, big, big, big fall! It will be a crushing blow, it seems to me. Perhaps it will teach her a lesson, but will she ever trust guys again?
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\nYour writing has been much more focused these past few days; seems like you're feeling confident about your story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25101863","dateCreated":"1276180943","smartDate":"Jun 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25101863"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Wednesday's post","description":"Your writing is getting better and better. In this new section, you seem more confident in your writing. The paragraphs breaks are clearer, the dialogue is crisper, and you simply seem more in control of the story. You've found your focus...making this a lot of fun to read.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"25063129","dateCreated":"1276089263","smartDate":"Jun 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/25063129"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Tuesday","description":"Wait: he talks in a monotone and sounds like a walking dictionary. How can she not be suspicious? Is she really so blinded by his physical beauty? Is she really so desperate?
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\nI suppose she is.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24982667","dateCreated":"1275862716","smartDate":"Jun 6, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"jakec_fischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jakec_fischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24982667"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Great Novella","description":"Great novella so far. I like the drama, and everything that's going on. Is this in any way connected to you?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24976489","dateCreated":"1275832265","smartDate":"Jun 6, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24976489"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Friday\/Saturday","description":"I'm a little confused:
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\n1. Is there one person here (Gustavo) or more than one? You say "their," which makes it seem plural, but you only mention Gustavo, so I'm not sure.
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\n2. Does the flash of light indicate that Gustavo (and other?) is an alien? Are we supposed to think of this light as symbolic rather than an indication that G is an extra terrestrial? I'm not sure.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24850621","dateCreated":"1275430038","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24850621"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"weekend post","description":"It's clear that you enjoy writing party scenes.
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\nAt this point, I'm a little uncertain about the direction of your novella. You've done a good job of introducing the characters and the setting, but I'm not sure what problem or conflict might be driving the novella now. What are we wondering about? what's making us read on and on and on?
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\nDon't get me wrong: what you have is fun. It just seems a bit direction-less right now. So...plan some direction! We'll work on this in class on Thursday, but start thinking about a conflict or issue that you can use to structure the middle of your novella.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24826639","dateCreated":"1275395375","smartDate":"Jun 1, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24826639"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"credit for second deadline","description":"20\/45 (2000\/4500 new words)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24728733","dateCreated":"1275004243","smartDate":"May 27, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24728733"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Thursday's post","description":"I was SURE she was pregnant. I'm glad you resisted that plot line. This gives you many more options.
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\n(Also, thanks for the new spacing)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"24679749","dateCreated":"1274919837","smartDate":"May 26, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Misterfischer","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Misterfischer","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1259541818\/Misterfischer-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bhsnovellas.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/24679749"},"dateDigested":1532128376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Wednesday's post","description":"You've left off at a very dramatic moment. I sort of have a guess about how the test will turn out, but I'll be patient.
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\nIf you can, I urge you to slow your story down even further. Again, you're getting hooked on pushing the plot forward and cutting short really great scenes (like the one in the store, when they have to buy the test kit, and the scene when she's in the bathroom, alone). No need to rush. Try to linger. It will help me get a clearer sense of who your characters are.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}